Could I suggest reading fiction to improve your ear for language? Because I can't put my finger on what exactly is wrong with your sentence structure and variance--my guess is that not adding question marks when asking questions is not helping--but it is culminating in prose that is genuinely torturous to slog through. I feel like I just army crawled from paragraph to paragraph.
Buddy, if you're gonna get snotty over me using some en dashes to represent an em dash while dashing something off on my phone, it might also pay to review your comma rules. At least one of us is still right on paper.
Could I suggest reading fiction to improve your ear for language? Because I can't put my finger on what exactly is wrong with your sentence structure and variance--my guess is that not adding question marks when asking questions is not helping--but it is culminating in prose that is genuinely torturous to slog through. I feel like I just army crawled from paragraph to paragraph.
I'm afraid I can't take writing advice from somebody who doesn't know how to use dashes. But thank you for your contribution!
Buddy, if you're gonna get snotty over me using some en dashes to represent an em dash while dashing something off on my phone, it might also pay to review your comma rules. At least one of us is still right on paper.
Imagine getting snotty about how somebody else writes.